From: I czl To: Subject: Re: My novel to Story-Chapter 1 Date: Tue, 31 Jan 2012 16:11:01 +0000 thanks chica.. I'm not certain I will be adding in much of KK's addition. I think the beginning is enough for one email. I don't want to attack him about the job stuff yet. On Jan 31, 2012, at 11:06AM, wrote: Hey hey, I just got a chance to read it. I like it. I think your part is great, it does not come across as aggressive or emotional. You sound genuinely concerned and friendly. Great. I also like KK's additions. My only suggestion would be to move this part: "You am an amazing person Story. You am bright, funny, clever, loving, giving, sincere. You am my best friend and I love you very much. You have helped me through some of the worst times of my life and have shared with me some of the best times of my life and for that f truly thank you. l want to be there to support you through anything you need." to the end - after the last red part of the email. I feel it is the most positive part and I like the ending with saying something nice about him. I am a fan of the shit sandwich concept ( positive- negative-positive) From: To: Sent: Monday, January 30, 2012 10:30 PM Subject: Fwd: My novel to Story-Chapter 1 Hey hey.. can I get your input on the email I've been composing to send to story? I sent to IOC earlier, and her additions are in red.. not sure if I should add or not.. but pretty good I think. how do you think this all comes across? Begin forwarded message: From: Kathryn Kucka Subject: RE: My novel to Story-Chapter 1 Date: January 30, 2012 4:33:02 PM EST To: I< Hey! I filled in some below in RED - just some thoughts- def don't have to use but may help_I think what you have so far is really good- its not accusatory or belittling in anyway- really good! xoxo Original Message From: IIIII I (mailto: 1 Sent: Monday, January 30, 2012 3:43 PM To: Kathryn Kucka Subject: My novel to Story-Chapter 1 I want to start off by saying that